I walked with you …

I walked with you in time suspended

in a country far from strife

where in the gentle coastal breeze

flowering grasses bent their plumes

to the Punic thistle blooms ..

and sweet was life ..

in the meadow mallows flourished

in a haze of lilac-pink;

and a wind-swept rowan tree

held its orange berries close

like those silent thoughts we each did think.

Through a screen of blackthorn leaves

we looked out upon the ocean

with its immensity of blue ..

just two figures in a landscape

amid butterflies and sloes,

walking in our waking dreams

as now it seems … .

About atomsofstars

Reticent .. but I hope my poetry speaks for me .. Favourite quotation .. ' Uttering a word is like striking a note on the keyboard of the imagination.' Ludwig Wittgenstein
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12 Responses to I walked with you …

  1. erbdex says:

    Very well written.

    • atomsofstars says:

      Good evening, erbdex ….

      Why, thank you very much! I’m delighted that you think so .. most kind of you to to take the time to read this poem and to comment.
      I appreciate your interest very much.

  2. papaguinea says:

    Words … imagery … Marya, you are a master craftsman. Its lovely to see and hear these lines, and to know you are very much with us still!

  3. atomsofstars says:

    How lovely to see you, PapaG !

    Thank you so much for such compliments which I’m rather embarrassed to receive .. but I’m very pleased to know that you have enjoyed this poem so much.

    I have replied to Kojo on MyT … it was so delightful to see him there. Much love to you all .. Marya x

  4. Welcome from Carthage, poetess! Your wonderful poem has been a mallow-infuse for Londinenses, here, reading ‘in the meadow mallows flourished’….

  5. atomsofstars says:

    Hello Didacus and thank you for your words of welcome … I’m happy to know that you enjoyed these lines … thank you very much for your kind compliment.

  6. JM says:

    Hello Marya,

    How the mood and the moment can change our perceptions of commonplace things like butterflies and sloes! But then, as Coleridge would say, our eyes are much more than mere cameras which only imitate nature ; for, in fact, they play their part in creating nature – and then changing us.

    Dream on, fair Poet! And let us long share your lovely world.

  7. atomsofstars says:

    Hello again, Jamie … Yes, indeed, ‘the mood and the moment’ but are butterflies and sloes ever commonplace? 🙂

    Ah, Coleridge … his thoughts a banquet for the soul. Are you now reading further volumes including Biographia Literaria ? What a mind, what a genius, what a life!

    Thank you for your extravagant appraisal … I’m somewhat embarrassed to be termed a poet .. I just feel that I write my thoughts in this amateurish fashion because this is often the only way I can express them .. to me ‘a poet’ is something else altogether … A Shakespeare, A Dante, A Keats, A Coleridge are worthy of the description, I feel. I just write …

  8. JM says:

    I knew I was risking all by mentioning Coleridge, Marya, but I was feeling reckless. His name often pops up in Owen Barfield’s essays, for they have a common interest in poetic diction and the meanings of words. So, I intend to read both in some depth this winter and actually take notes ! It’s a long time since I took any book so seriously, so I must set time aside for the tasks.

    Extravagant appraisal? Come now, a poet is a poet, and it’s a (forgiveable) mistake to be too modest. Let your genius, your indwelling spirit, have her say ; for she only offers what suits you in the moment ; and they are fine offerings. 🙂

  9. atomsofstars says:

    Hello Jamie ….

    I’ve noticed your references to Owen Barfield’s work before and now I have at last ‘Googled’ him after seeing his name in your reply 🙂

    Poetic Diction is now on my must-read list .. it will make for fascinating discoveries, I’m certain.
    Yes, I feel the same need to actually study Coleridge’s prodigious output and not merely read his works … there is a note now attached to so many pages of ‘Darker Reflections’ that I am almost tempted to desecrate this volume and also ‘The Major Works’ with ‘marginalia’ of my own. 🙂

    Thank you for both the admonishment and your kind words.

  10. JM says:

    Well, Marya, I have ordered the Major Works today from Amazon, so I will be well prepared for my studies and desecrations. And I hope you remember who’s to blame for all the poetical pondering to come. 🙂

    I hope you enjoy Barfield ; he was one of the Inklings – the Lewis, Tolkien set – but had to leave Oxford to take over the family law firm. He is frightfully knowledgable and his writing is grippingly concise at times ; no mercy to readers, so be patient 🙂

    The ladies in my life (boss and daughters) have presented me with an Ipad thingy, which I’ll try to use for note-taking when I have learned how to work it. I’ll probably revert to my scribble-pads within a week.

  11. atomsofstars says:

    Hello Jamie … and I have ordered Poetic Diction … thank you for the warning .. I will open the book with trepidation and a ready supply of paracetamol 🙂

    I know, without question , that you will enjoy The Major Works … also headache -inducing at times but a book that will be a companion always 🙂

    An Ipad ! What a lovely gift ! You’ll master it, I’m sure … and now I visualize Coleridge astonished at such at such an aide-memoire ….

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