A meeting of minds …

You took my heart
from its barbed wire cage –
unconsciously
you prised apart
the bars of my defence …

stage by subtle stage,
it was your candour
that turned the key;
meeting my mind –
unshackled –
you set my spirit free …

if your soul had met mine
when the earth was young
might it explain how time’s
innocence had once begun …

Love held and lost,
pain and regret ;
those thorns among the roses;
the currency of life spent
like the  petals
of the violet falling
on the softest moss
to make the sweetest recompense … .

About atomsofstars

Reticent .. but I hope my poetry speaks for me .. Favourite quotation .. ' Uttering a word is like striking a note on the keyboard of the imagination.' Ludwig Wittgenstein
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6 Responses to A meeting of minds …

  1. This is a truly beautiful poem. There was something about the third stanza that really caught my eye.

    You’re very talented Atoms. Do you have any printed publishings?

  2. atomsofstars says:

    Why, thank you very much! I am pleased that you enjoyed it but a bit embarrassed by such praise.
    I am very appreciative of your interest and encouraging words, thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

    No, I haven’t published anything .. rather undecided about taking that step.

  3. JM says:

    A lovely poem, Marya. It puts me in mind of Clarinda and Burns – Ae fond kiss.

    It is so important to set our fond memories in a safe place before the unbidden words fade. You have done that so well – here and elsewhere. Thank you.

  4. atomsofstars says:

    Good morning, Jamie

    Thank you very much … I’m delighted you’ve enjoyed this. ‘Unbidden words’, yes .. thoughts which demand more attention .. not content to remain unrecorded.

    I’m afraid I’m woefully ignorant of much of Burns’ poetry . I only remember the most well-known ( to us Sassenachs, that is 🙂 ) his wonderful and unsurpassed description of a mouse in To A Mouse … ‘ wee, sleekit, cowrin, tim’rous beastie’ and the poem, A Red, Red Rose ..
    I’ve looked up Ae fond kiss … and found the lines:
    Ae fond kiss, and then we sever
    Ae fareweel, and then for ever!
    Deep in heart-wrung tears I’ll pledge thee
    Warring sighs and groans I’ll wage thee

    Had we never lov’d sae kindly
    Had we never lov’d sae blindly
    Never met or never parted
    We had ne’er been broken-hearted.

    Thank you … I’m all the richer for having become acquainted with it 🙂

  5. Shermeen says:

    Marya, good morning. You have quite surpassed yourself here, have you not! Each word is beautiful; each expression tells the tale of the intangible yet enduring permanency of love with delightful angst.
    (I too love ‘A Red, Red, Rose’).

  6. atomsofstars says:

    Good morning, Shermeen ..

    Well, thank you very much ! I’m very pleased that you like it so much.
    Yes, ‘enduring permanency’ .. this is the definition of love.

    and here is that wonderful song of Burns :-

    O, my luve’s like a red, red rose
    That’s newly sprung in June
    O, my luve’s like the melodie
    That’s sweetly play’d in tune

    As fair art thou, my bonie lass
    So deep in luve am I
    And I will luve thee still, my Dear
    Till a’ the seas gang dry

    Till a’ the seas gang dry, my Dear
    And the rocks melt wi’ the sun!
    O I will luve thee still, my Dear
    While the sands o’ life shall run

    And fare thee weel, my only Luve
    And fare thee weel a while!
    And I will come again, my Luve
    Tho’ it were ten thousand mile.

    Have a happy day 🙂

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